tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5450424838277339646.post6120675247829622462..comments2023-09-27T11:05:00.870-04:00Comments on Savvy Verse & Wit: 36th Virtual Poetry CircleSerenahttp://www.blogger.com/profile/04745809545249574387noreply@blogger.comBlogger4125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5450424838277339646.post-91491661542823856562010-03-15T09:12:44.219-04:002010-03-15T09:12:44.219-04:00What strikes me about this poem is the heaviness. ...What strikes me about this poem is the heaviness. <br /><br />And I think that asleep means dead.<br /><br />In this case given that the boy has 5 siblings, a mother and father, and the tall man (maybe US soldier or relative) is digging the 7 graves to bury the boy's family.<br /><br />For me the most poignant part of the poem is in these lines:<br /><br />"his head was buried<br />in Serenahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04745809545249574387noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5450424838277339646.post-74507654547042384202010-03-15T09:01:35.742-04:002010-03-15T09:01:35.742-04:00Who is the tall man? Are the parents and siblings...Who is the tall man? Are the parents and siblings "asleep" as in "put to sleep" or is the tall man going to kill them and then bury them? I have trouble with the brevity of this poem; I'd have liked a more complete picture of the photo!Jeannehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01374498643286099244noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5450424838277339646.post-19368336995055832702010-03-15T08:53:42.747-04:002010-03-15T08:53:42.747-04:00There's a heaviness in this poem that I notice...There's a heaviness in this poem that I noticed from the first line. I think it could have been longer though, given us a more complete picture.<br /><br />--Anna<br /><a href="http://diaryofaneccentric.blogspot.com/" rel="nofollow">Diary of an Eccentric</a>Annahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08046635675540466183noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5450424838277339646.post-80119496095957799232010-03-13T08:42:09.014-05:002010-03-13T08:42:09.014-05:00I really like the last part that begins "in h...I really like the last part that begins "in his hands/all the clouds of the world/were waiting" and the poem definitely ends with a punch. I'm not sure about the beginning. It could have done more. It just feels like a vehicle for the rest of the poem. Or maybe my biggest problem is the title. It says too much. If it weren't there, then the rest of the poem would be more Leslie @ This is the Refrainhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18027804132268043518noreply@blogger.com