Apr 4, 2009

Poem #4, PAD Challenge 2009

Day 4, I'm on a roll. Here's the prompt from today. You must choose an animal and write a poem about that animal or something to do with that animal. Another rough draft:

Walrus

Smooth, sharp tusk
makes my lisp more pronounced.
It's harder to enunciate with a mouthful.
But my family and friends don't mind
we get along well, travel and see the sights
when we can muster the strength
to drag ourselves across sheets of ice
with flippered feet and rolls of fat.
Don't feel sad for me
I don't need Jenny Craig
and I don't need that thermal suit of yours.
I've got my own.
Besides have you seen me dance
below the ice, in the cold ocean, I've got
silky samba moves.




What did you write today?

For more information about the challenge, go here.

9 comments:

susan said...

Where's your poem?

Serena said...

Susan: I don't know what happened, but its up now!

Ladytink_534 said...

Lol, not really my thing but I loved your poem!

susan said...

Very enjoyable read. Does the writing comes as effortlessly as as the read impresses me? There is an ease with the flow of your lines, and your word choices provide the greatest impact for what you intended.

Serena said...

LadyTink: I had to go with the prompt and this is what came out...after a long time thinking about it.

Susan: I'm glad you liked this poem, though it took me a long time to come up with it. I started a rough draft about a cardinal and hated it, so I chucked it and thought about the prompt some more. Here's what you get for all that thinking.

nbbaker1102 said...

This was a fun one! It made me smile. I thought it was effective to do it from the walrus's point of view.

Serena said...

nbbaker: thanks for stopping by and checking it out.

Anna said...

I really like this one, especially the first two lines.

--Anna
Diary of an Eccentric

Serena said...

I really liked the last two lines...lol guess that means the middle sucks.