Apr 2, 2009

Poem #2, PAD Challenge 2009

OK, here it is. Today's prompt was to write an outsider poem, whether its the narrator, an inanimate object, or someone else as the outsider. This is my rough draft:


Sisters

Cuddled on the recliner,
two halves of the coin--
Black on black
with white paws barely touching.
What’s it like
to be a feline sister.
Ready to curl up, bookends.
Strike and swipe claws in skin
at a pin drop.
Chunk of fur flies.

What did you write today?

For more information about the challenge, go here.

10 comments:

Jenners said...

Another good one! I like how you chose to approach this prompt. I think we're all in for a fun month of reading! Hope you can keep it up!

And are you familiar with the poetry genius that is J. Cosmo Newbery over at Notes On A Serviette? His blog is all poetry -- they are just so enjoyable. Here is the link if you don't know about him already:

http://jcosmonewbery2.blogspot.com/

susan said...

I like this, too. We had two sisters, Patches and Parker. Parker died, and we all were depressed for some time afterwards. I worried not knowing what the loss was like for Patches.

My sister and I are close. We rarely fought. The fighting you watched as an outsider made me laugh.

Lezlie said...

I like it! The very end reminded me of some of the Cat Haiku I had stashed on my computer. :-)

Lezlie

nbbaker1102 said...

I think you captured sisters so well! Great poem

Serena said...

Jenners: Thanks for the link; I had not heard of him...I will check out his blog.

Susan: I have one sister, though estranged from the family and I've never really known her...but my cats are sisters from the same litter and I just love watching how they relate to one another.

Lezlie: I'd love to see some of that cat haiku!

nbbaker: I'm glad you enjoyed the rough draft of this poem.

Lezlie said...

Serena ~ I'll email it to you. Some of them are hysterically funny!

Lezlie

Anna said...

Interesting that you chose the cats. Nice poem!

--Anna
Diary of an Eccentric

Serena said...

I really didn't feel like delving into heavy subject matter last night...you know like the typical racism story and what not.

naida said...

I like that Serena!
http://thebookworm07.blogspot.com/

Serena said...

Naida: Thanks for the compliment.